What’s wrong with this song? Well for starters, the title is stupid. Also its a bit too New Agey for its own good. After many days spent tracking long takes of various parts of A & B sections, I finally cobbled together a makeshift structure for this John Hughes-soundtrack inspired 80s new wave song.
The song seems to go on about 30-40 seconds too long at the end, but again, w\o lyrics here as placeholders it all feels a bit stark. Thinking of adding Aryn’s electric bass, some real drums to augment the electro drums and maybe some jangly guitar. Needs some serious help at this point.
Thoughts?
[audio:https://hellocomein.com/soundbox/hellomusic_mike/TheNinthGreatFire_v1a.mp3]
Nice Marie Antoinette soundtrack sound. I particularly like progression of the B section… Actually, have you thought about trying to swap the A and B section- the alternating i and iv (?) chords seems like it might work better as a peak chorus, and also you wouldn’t start the song with just two alternating chords. just a thought…
i thought about that.. but sort of like the b section as an interlude and the a section would also serve as the chorus.
i was thinking of repeating the b section one more time and then when it goes back to the I, IV fading out sooner to both shorten it up and emphasize the b section more.
I think with some more disjunct and broken electronic beats that change for the different sections coupled w\ some real drums as well, the flavor of the song would be a lot different.
I guess more modern electronic clicks and filtered drums would be nice to offset the 80s sound of synths.